Question and Answer

The Sentence Doctor

Q: Does this sentence make sense to you? How would you rephrase these sentences to sound more right?
(Questioner says, "English is my second language by the way:)" )

"Please, please please someone guide me through. I do not nearly love myself as much as I did before. I tried blaming others, it all comes back at me twofold. I tried to wash it out by intoxicating myself with musics, nothing works."

A: Yes, it makes sense, But it's actually several sentences. And there are a few corrections to make... though your English is astonishingly good for a non-native speaker. I particularly like the image of trying to wash it out by intoxicating yourself with music.

You should put a comma after each occurrence of 'please'. You should move 'nearly' to be just before 'as much as I did before.' You should replace the comma after 'others' with a semicolon or add the word 'and' or 'but'. Likewise, you should replace the comma after 'musics' with a semicolon or add the word 'but'. And you MUST take the 's' off of 'musics'.

So... it might read, 'Please, please, please, someone guide me through. I do not love myself nearly as much as I did before. I tried blaming others, but it all comes back to me twofold. I tried to wash it out by intoxicating myself with music, but nothing works.'

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